Engelsk låt, kritik önskas!
Hej, det här är min första "seriösa" låt som jag skrev ihop nu på ~10 minuter och skulle hjärtligen uppskatta lite konstruktiv kritik kring den, hoppas ni gillar den.
VERSE 1
I wake up, I'm drunk at the party/
I feel horrid, probably too much alcoholic/
Bloodstains all over the floor, what's the cause?/
I got to find out, and put myself into the right course/
Found a brain on the floor, all splattered, someone must've been battered/
But I stay calm, trying to figure out what's going on/
I walk out the door, and nothing is like before/
Tears pouring, I'm in the middle of a war/
Why is this happening to me? It must be a really bad dream/
Somebody, pinch me! This is not what it used to be/
I can hear them coming, they want me dead/
All they want to do is eating me, and getting fed/
But I have to keep fighting, and stay alert like a lightning/
People hiding, and the sun starts shining/
But they won't be alive, for their very next dining/
VERSE 2
A new era has begun, I grab my guns/
Now it's time to run, got to save my sons/
Packin a mac in the bac of the ac of my Cadillac/
The skies turn all black, I hold my gat/
I'm surrounded, they're all around me/
Bursting out shots, shit's getting hot/
They probably think they will survive, I think not/
It's not a rarity, that my gunshots create cavity/
Bullets rain, and their brains becomes vain/
This is so insane, everything goes up in flames/
I'm on a train, I'm finally saved, this feels so great/