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Fronkan the one legged pirate - The song


Allright check  this out
Try not to laugh
I swear i will love you with whole me heart
I think we can have a good start you and me
Well i dont think i can guarantee
guarantee you happiness
I cant call myself good at impress
But im doing my best
Neither im that best at express myself
But i promise to try
So here i go with my rhymes
In these dark times


I dont want to ruin anything
But i dont have a clue in how to get you
I won over you in that song with Blink182
Song, can you hear the sound of my heart?
It goes dong dong dong
Everytime im near you
I dont know what to do
So i grab a beer
Sit down and tries to disappear


Here we go again
Im sitting here outside in the rain
Thinking of you
I only got you on my mind
Cant we just pretend
That you and me are not friends
Can we try to pretend that your my girlfriend and im your boyfriend


See im on this track again
If you dont like this lyric please send it back and smack my head into the wall like and terrorist attack
Read it carefully and try to understand what i mean by this lyric
Even if you diss it, atleast i want you to know
that i still will always be here if you need me
By saying all this i know it can change our friendship
But please just say no if you dont want too and please let our friendship be as it was
Atleast try..