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Prince Ramzele - Walk in darkness

Vår Hiphop - Lyricism

   

2008-03-02 08:18

Prince Ramzele - Walk in darkness

En text jag skrev till ett skolprojekt, men jag ska recca den också så jag tänkte att jag kan väl lika gärna lägga upp den.  OBS: Tro inte att jag snackar om mig själv, har skildrat problemet från någon annans synvinkel.


I walk in darkness, try to find a way for my life,
I'm searching, haunting, looking for a way to the light,
I keep on walking, I try to handle my frights, 
Because I strive, so I can one day see the sunlight,

I'm just chilling, zipping on my soda,
Sitting and thinking for myself, in the sofa,
I want some mind solution, I want some prosper,
'Cause my thoughts, like shattered glass over the water,
I just sit back, try to keep my focus on it,
The things that roll in my mind, is always haunted,
Spreaded like a thousand galaxies, through the black holes,
A trapped soul, while the time is my foe,
Feels like I'm strapped, behind the bars and the chains,
I try to find my place, but I can't find my way,
And I can't change it, I'm like a slave,
In my own body, only walking in shade,
Of my thoughts, and my dream of having something real,
Have something special, and know what something feels,
But I ain't making no progress, so I just keep on walking,
I keep on searching my road, I keep on striving, still I walk in darkness,

Reff x2

So I'm just sitting on the same spot, with the same dust in the air,
On this same spot with the same place on the chair,
With the same thoughts, same moving on,
Unpatiently waiting for the future, I'm waiting for dawn,
To show, my tomorrow, to show the next day,
Of my life, new choices to take, lessons to make,
I wanna know my life so I can live it,
I wanna, prepare for the time, that I have been given,
Don't wanna waste it, wanna fulfill my dreams,
Wanna make something outta nothing, make my visions real,
I wanna make myself proud, over deeds I accomplished,
And make myself believe that I can deal with my problems,
Living in the present, the future and the past,
Gotta learn from mistakes, gotta learn where I'm at,
Still gotta remember to keep on dreaming, and moving,
I always gotta keep my dream on what I'm doing,

Reff x2


Ge gärna konstruktiv kritik (om ni nu ger någon alls).


2008-03-02 17:53
Upp?

2008-03-02 19:34
Det var ganska hög nivå faktiskt, men lite väl kryptiskt. Rimgalen som jag är så måste jag klaga lite på det också, vore trevligt med standardfeta rim, kändes inte heller som att allt rimmade riktigt. Men ser bra ut överlag, keep it up.
A historian is a prophet in reverse

2008-03-02 19:34
P.S. Bra flow, inget svårt att hitta.
A historian is a prophet in reverse

2008-03-02 20:45
hehe, det är min style, kryptiska meddelanden, mest bara praktist, man kan snacka tre verser om samma ämne utan att trötta ut det...:P

Tack för kritik.

2008-03-02 21:51
Feels like I'm strapped, behind the bars and the chains,
I try to find my place, but I can't find my way


va cool

o I'm just sitting on the same spot, with the same dust in the air,
On this same spot with the same place on the chair,
With the same thoughts, same moving on,

också

allt som allt så föll de lite, declining quality, ju längre man kom in i verserna som sen avslutades bra. kul med mer engelska
norman bates behemot
bubba fett alfred bello
arthur's detour azazello

2008-03-02 21:55
Engelska taking over.
A historian is a prophet in reverse

2008-03-02 22:37
Hehe tack så mycket spex, kolla gärna in min rushing elephants också, ska lägga upp resten av mitt shit.


2008-03-03 09:42
bra denna också, skulle vilja höra den inspelad
My life is fucked up and the only thing i'm doing is jacking up, i stabb motherfuckers with my pocket nife, and this is the better half of my fucking life. <br>