16 bars of feelin's

16 bars of feelin's


jiee, här är då en text som jag troligen ska spela in
vill bara veta vad whoa-folket tycker om texten innan jag reccar den




really, i don't care a shit about anythin'/
'cause i'm under the surface like babyswim/
i don't give a fuck about old feelin's/
i don't care bout pain, as long as i'm bleeding/
i just want you silly ass gone for ever/
and i don't want my mom's no more, take her/
with this i got it said, the feeling are dead/
you left me on the ground, with a bullet in my head/
i was the one, that always trusted you/
if yo were goin' to jail, i'ma be busted too/
but you betraid me, i don't mean to be hatin'/
i just can't stand all these times you've been fakin'/
get the fuck away, i don't want you on my funeral/
if the truth come's out, it won't be beautiful/
i hate you, you were my best friend, now you are my enemy/
even if you killed me, you will for ever remember me/



konstruktiv kritik + vad som kan förbättras är nog det jag behöver

rimmen har jag inte brytt mig så mkt om här, eftersom jag normalt sätt inte rappar på engelska och att det ska vara djupt


Peace