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Rain - Untold Story.txt

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2006-01-29 18:24

Rain - Untold Story.txt

Trough my life, I’ve seen darkness and endless pain
Despite how I lived, the status quo remained the same
No air did ever pass trough my lungs yet I remained alive
These endless nights made me very abstained to fight

I did lit a torch to find the end of this continuous maze
I searched like a fool, but the walls always remained
No one could see my oblivious pain, it was hidden beneath
I could taste the longing of my happiness all over my teeth

I tried to learn a lesson, a lesson that no one could teach
I tried to meet requirements, requirements that no one could meet
I tried to tell myself that I wasn’t doing anything wrong
Yet I always knew, that I was lying to myself all along

My fabled words didn’t pass trough anyone’s head anymore
I was nowhere near to be saved until something washed ashore
Something that I could adore, something truly irreplaceable
Something that now has left my world, my faceless truth.

A world build in the blink of an eye now tenderly fades away
I’m falling with it, and I will continue fall until my dying day
I could scream out that I wanted it all to stay yet then again
I wouldn’t face it; I would see facades building up to be replaced. .

So now my voiceless whispers all fade into the silence
Taking a blow that resulted in blood without violence
Without my dreams I wouldn’t be the person you see
Without my tears I wouldn’t see who I used to bee

A faceless expression of a fading world,
An untold story, to sad to be heard




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2006-01-29 20:38
hmm... känns typ som du försöker göra texten bättre genom att använda "svår engelska"... vissa rader måla du upp rätt najs... men i det stora hela tyckte ja den var rätt intetsägande...
rimmen e inte bra heller, men det är inte speciellt viktigt...

P.S. Man säger inte "I did lit.." utan det blir "I did light..." hade det varit till exempel "I would" hade det blivit lit...

2006-01-29 20:39
just ja... blev lite upprepande med "remained" i varannan rad i början

2006-01-29 21:07
Tycker den är mkt bättre än vad som sagts hittils.
Gillar uppbyggandet o allt, riktigt skönt :)
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2006-01-29 21:48
Nice flow, men verkar lite väl ansträngt på vissa rader men blir bättre mot mitten och slutet:)
Nice handling genom hela texten!
Good work
 
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2006-01-29 21:59
hehe tack som fan ;)
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